Frantumaglia

I’ve already done enough for this long story: I wrote it. If the book is worth anything, that should be sufficient.

but I wouldn’t exaggerate it in the writing with a disparaging imitation of a theatrical or film performance, etc.

with a display of sentimentality that doesn’t communicate sentiments

Caserta says he wants them right away. I’ve brought the photographs” (forgive this ridiculous pseudo dialect sketch).

maybe I’m wrong. I’m writing in a hurry, without the time necessary to refine senseless suggestions.

She can’t, I think, enjoy solitude.

Yes, if possible abolish what remains of the voice-over: it shouldn’t be difficult for you, at this point.

Her relationships with men are not experiences but experiments intended to test a choked-off body: failed experiments.

Furthermore, maybe they don’t take into account sufficiently your effort to reinvent the character of Delia in a cinematographic mode. I apologize in advance.

Many of the notes will seem to you unjustified, dictated more by the way the event and the characters remain in my mind than by the way they are now in the writing